It was the first day in 11th standard. New school, new atmosphere. She was a little bit scared. But was excited that she is finally getting relieved from a girls only school. Always she wanted to study in a co-ed. But her parents didnât think so. Now finally!!!!! She looked around at the sea of men-folk around her⦠did I say men. No, they were all boy-folk!!! Oh! I canât wait. And suddenly she bumped into a very handsome guyâ¦he was tall, not too dark, he was well-built and he was charming. And above all he didnât look âboyishâ at all. She was like âWHOAAAâ. She passed him and looked back and prayed âoh, God pls let him be in my classâ!!
She found her class. Went inside, took a seat. And looked aroundâ¦.only to find the handsome hunk sitting on opposite row!!!!!! YIIPPPIIEEâ¦.her heart made a somersault.
He was her first crush after Amir Khan.
She nursed her feelings for him, inside, going doe-eyed with fluttering eyelashes every time he came in front of her. Never did she tell him about it. One day she decided to take his usual desk in Chemistry lab. One thing she never knew was about his temper. When he found his desk occupied by her, he threw a test tube full of copper sulphate solution at her, in front of the whole class. First she was stunned, then cried and then stormed out. Love turned into revenge. That evening she sneaked into teacherâs room and tore his chemistry record book. No one found that.
Her love was doomed!
************************* 8 years later ***********************
One day thru a group mail, she got his email id. She mailed him under a pseudo name. Soon they stuck a new friendship, he still unknown about her identity. He even started calling her; still she didnât reveal her identity. She soon realised one thing. He was not that handsome hunk anymore. He had lost his job. He had lost his love 3 yrs back. He had taken to heavy drinking. He was lonely to the core. But nothing mattered to her.
And after 6 months, she told him, who she was. And she told him one more thing. That she was in love with him from the first day at school. He was thrilled. âYou should have told me this earlier. â He told sorry for that copper sulphate incident. But she didnât admit that she was the one who tore his chemistry record.
Her relationship grew. She felt good that he was finally on her feet. She didnât love him. But she enjoyed this new thing. She told âIf I donât get married after 30, I will marry youâ. He agreed. He was getting more attached to her. He started calling her at odd times. She stopped taking his call and gave him excuses. It was a sweet revenge for her, but he was obsessively in love with her. He spent hrs in phone with her.
Before her 25 th birthday , she got married to a guy whom her parents chose. He tried to call her, when he knew about her engagement. But she had changed her cell number.
***************************** 3 yrs later **************************
She came into the drawing room to read the newspaper, after putting her toddler to bed. There was a familiar picture in the obituary anniversary column. It was him. She felt happy and relieved that she wasnât 30 and unmarried.
Hmm...*thinking* "Who could this be?"
ReplyDeleteProfound. I get it.....wow!
ReplyDeleteYou are a terific story teller...
ReplyDeleteKudos to you.
sanakaran: thinking?? *smiling that devilish grin*... think...think..and tell me...
ReplyDeletesab: thanks dearie.....*hugs*
Is this fiction or fact??
ReplyDelete**awed by the narration**
ReplyDeletemay be fiction or may be real, I am not able to digest the story. Why?? I dont know!!
ReplyDeleteYeah. I got it. I dont like tragedy movies. I love happy movies and fun movies.
ReplyDeleteWow! Was she happy he is dead or was she happy because she was not married to him and widowed? very profound and very well narrated! Revenge is sweeet, love is bitter!
ReplyDeleteshail --- oh! compliments from the official SS teller!!! thank you! *blushing*
ReplyDeleteraj--even i love only funny movies..but life is not always funny, sometimes...isnt it?
joey---i dont know dearie..i just know she was happy...but i dont know exactly why she was happy *she is not me*
Kind of a sad situation... Makes you feel for the guy, but in another sense, I can understand her feeling happy because of his death... Totally irrelevant to the story, but I think you know what I'm talking about... Twisted I know, but lately that's how I've been... all twisted and bent out of shape...
ReplyDeletekroor singh...correctaa...
ReplyDeletemanushyane vattu pidikkathe kaaryam angu paranjoode...
ethra pravasyamnu paranja oru vayassane ingane ittu odikkunnathu?
What can i say more !..sweet revenge eh ?..
ReplyDeleteThe narration was out of the world !..
Swats : was going to write some thing like this ..you just got in first ..
Take care !
wonderful story... i saw this story from both points of view... funny how when you can't have something you want it even more... thank you for sharing this with us *smile*
ReplyDeleteand when you find out you can have it, you realize it wasn't really what you wanted after all... haha
ReplyDeleteNORMA---thats EXACTLY the crux of this incident/story... when finally its inside ur fist, u want to throw it away!!! thanks alot...
ReplyDelete"She felt good that he was finally on her feet."...you do have a way with words... and wow!!! wonderful narration... and I guess she was happy because she knew she had made a right decision in life...she had not fallen in 'stupid love' and suffered all through her life
ReplyDeletethat obituary proved her decision was right
well i was wondering, if on the contrary, she would have seen him posing with bill gates in that newspaper picture, she would have cursed herself like hell...
This universe is more attuned to feminine energy. We hear creation of universe took 6 days, the planet of womanhood, femininity, aesthtics and beauty is Venus; Venus represents again number 6.
ReplyDeleteSo females are more attuned to the universal forces. And universe responds to females more rapidly in the shapes of mother's, lover's, wife's, Sister's prayers.
So universe responded to the prayers of the lady, who wasn't 30 and unmarried.
Lovely Post.
An immaculate presentation of universal principles.
Thank you so much for Sharing.
Shahid.
Wonderful short story! great narration..
ReplyDeleteswathy nice story. Anyway u also proved u r good in short story writing . Expect more from u.lol
ReplyDeleteI am neither a good story teller nor
ReplyDeletea good story reader.May be because I am lazy.
Normally I skip stories:>P
But you made me to glue to the seat to
read from first word to the last word...
That itself is a good testimony for the
tempo you maintained there...Congrats !!!
I am not probing the charecters here :>D
Adipoli! Awesome narration, loved it sweetheart!! :-)
ReplyDeleteBut me no likey sad ending :-( Next story should be all lovey-dovey ok? :-)
Copper sulphate is CuSO4?
ReplyDelete"STORY" Kollamm...Good narration....Every one like to categorize it as story...I too prefer that...:-)
ReplyDeletei am sure i don't like tragedies.
First enikke oru classmates touch thoni...may be because of ***after 8 years*** and after 3 years enne ullathe konde akkam...
Cruel... how can one be so cruel(the girl), and how can one be so dumb (the guy). first i thought itz a sequel to the movie "classmates" but it turned out to be something different.. nice imagination, swatz....
ReplyDeleteGIRI---i just thot abt u, today, while going thru orkut scraps!
ReplyDeleteithu "story" thanneya giri... allennu thonnunnooo??? pinne "classmates" njan ithu vare kandilla keto? naattil vannittu kaananam!
literal quality onnum illennee...chumma manassil vannathu ...
but njan ivide GIRI-ye ottum expect cheythilla!!!!
thanks for visiting!
wow, this is worth publishing in Magz yaar. too good. If any of the thing is real? I wonder !!
ReplyDeleteBut then Imgaination is alwased based on truths, some thing somewhere.
that was really something very beautiful. i couldn't stop reading it and i didn't notice my boss entering to my room till he called my name.
ReplyDeletelovely. pls do write more.
wow...wow...i never knew i could get so many responses.... this is my first attempt in fiction , though i shud admit that certain percentage is fact.. but it is a mixture of facts, like from what i have heard, i have seen and i have come to know.
ReplyDeleteChandra's comment makes me feel top of the world, as he is not a SS reader! ****i made chandra read***
Giri was my classmate, I never expected him here! thank God! i didnt write anything from my college days !!!*phewww*
Lovleen - thank you. i really dont know exactly why she(in the story) was happy...
Archer--now thats a new theory that u put forward. i never knew that. i thot that female possessed more power like intuitions etc. i have seen prayers work too. but then i thot, thats cos they prayed more intensely!
now u ahve give me food for thot and research!! thanks
patsy, anju--- oh! i think this was a fluke..i mean i am no good in stories dearie...
sneh---actually it ended that way dearie...pssst ...even i hate tragedy stories...
anoop---why every one thot abt "classmates". i havent seen that movie yet!! thanks alot!
swati---magz??? *rollin eyes and fainting*
gowri---oh! did u!!!! ooops...what did he tell??? just be careful in future... *a compliment for me* thanks!
cheeze--u too thot like that??? may be cos, as i am 5 yrs elder to u, i reach there 5 minutes faster than you! he he he...
ReplyDeleteWell Well..that very brilliant...the way u handled story plot is very good....every thg in end I expected the author to be poignant..lovely
ReplyDeleteHe asked me what in the world i was doing to the extent didnt know that he came in.
ReplyDeletei just printed ur fiction/fact and passed to him.
will u believe? he sat there and read till it finished, the next question was "did she publish it? it looks real life story, ask her to publish, sure all will like it" so Swat Chech, not only me the whole office read ur article and loved it.
you are simply great.
GOWRI----oh! whom did i think, before writing that???....my very very first attempt....and did it really capture every readers attention???
ReplyDelete**cant believe***
oh...i am on the top of the world!!
..now lemme come down....
:-))
Narration is too good.....and its Fiction...but seems like Fact...
ReplyDelete>>ithu "story" thanneya giri... allennu thonnunnooo???
ReplyDeletestory thane. story alla enne thoniyilla.. I just wrote story in caps. ellavarkum oru samshayam story anoo allayoo enne okke.
Naan vallapozhum okke keri blog vayikarunde..enne vichariche ezuthunnathil restriction venda ketto...:-)
"She felt happy and relieved that she wasn’t 30 and unmarried."
ReplyDeleteI love that girl... I really do...
The most sensible thing a girl could do....
*Applauds*
This doesnt seem like a fact...woman dont take tht big a revenge
ReplyDeleteYou are welcome, Swathi.
ReplyDeleteWonder where you got that picture!!! when entering Ann Arbor, MI from the North, there is this huge bill board right before downtown (ours is a small university town anyway) with a similar picture except with a green eeeeeerie light ! my daughter and I see it everytime we pass by......
ReplyDeleteluvly....
ReplyDeleteclaps claps claps..=D>
Nice post..Swat...and one way or other ...be happy for the lost love..
ReplyDeleteas some one put it !..i like to categorise it as a story !..you are 5 years elder !...hmmmm..athinde vallya gunam onnum kanunnilla !
ReplyDeleteha ha! nice incident.
ReplyDelete;-)
I still belive it's more than a fiction, hehe!
Beautifully narrated ... guess there is more fiction to it than fact.I loved the story. lets us have more.
ReplyDeletelong time since i read a short story that had a twist (in this case a big jerk) ... u caught me off-guard, swathi .. for a moment i thought it was just another love story .. :) good one!
ReplyDeletebeautiful narration!
ReplyDelete